Thanks for sharing your project. I hope you have enjoyed the course.
Your character is clear: Charo is a laboratory technician who hates her job.
But let me throw you a few questions and if you feel like it, answer them.
If you had to state your premise under the premise of "what would happen if...":
What do you come up with?
What if a lab technician who hates her job met a mysterious stranger?
Write another example of what if based on Charo.
Write another example of what if based on Charo.
Regarding the traditional premise:
During a book signing, Charo, a laboratory technician who hates her life, meets a man who works in an exclusive clinic on the Moroccan Atlantic coast.
Ok, this is your premise, but the last part of the structure (the part that corresponds to having to act interesting) would work better if Charo has to do, perform an action, act, or deal with a situation. complicated. Logically, the conflict may be related to the fact that she just met the man who works at the clinic. But, what difficulties is Charo going to find from now on?
Your first sentence is very powerful: The woman who opened the door for you was barefoot.
And the first lines of your story are very well raised. The dialogue works well, it anticipates the relationship between the two characters, the dimensions are also worked on, as are the metaphors and adjectives.
I miss, yes, your creative process: how did you get to Charo, what are its layers of interest (all of which you have assessed), its possible conflicts (it is clear that he hates his job and that is a very important conflict), if you have contemplated some more as well as the possible subject of your story.
I know there are many things but I am fascinated to know how you have arrived at the premise, the first sentence and the first lines.
If you want to share it, that would be great.
In any case, thank you very much for sending your project and for anticipating Charo's trip. The truth is that they make you want to know more.
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Thanks for sharing your project. I hope you have enjoyed the course.
Your character is clear: Charo is a laboratory technician who hates her job.
But let me throw you a few questions and if you feel like it, answer them.
If you had to state your premise under the premise of "what would happen if...":
What do you come up with?
Regarding the traditional premise:
Ok, this is your premise, but the last part of the structure (the part that corresponds to having to act interesting) would work better if Charo has to do, perform an action, act, or deal with a situation. complicated. Logically, the conflict may be related to the fact that she just met the man who works at the clinic. But, what difficulties is Charo going to find from now on?
Your first sentence is very powerful: The woman who opened the door for you was barefoot.
And the first lines of your story are very well raised. The dialogue works well, it anticipates the relationship between the two characters, the dimensions are also worked on, as are the metaphors and adjectives.
I miss, yes, your creative process: how did you get to Charo, what are its layers of interest (all of which you have assessed), its possible conflicts (it is clear that he hates his job and that is a very important conflict), if you have contemplated some more as well as the possible subject of your story.
I know there are many things but I am fascinated to know how you have arrived at the premise, the first sentence and the first lines.
If you want to share it, that would be great.
In any case, thank you very much for sending your project and for anticipating Charo's trip. The truth is that they make you want to know more.
A hug and thanks again.
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